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Narrative Reading Response

It was a very exciting in English. We had three days to work on a personal narrative that needed a purpose, significance, and vivid details. For three days every student began to hammer down on their keyboards typing wildly so that they could do a good job on their next big assignment. Below I am going to explain my experiences and some concerns with my personal narrative.

So far I am quite pleased with the work that I have done so far. I am very surprised with how much work that I have gotten done in the past week, and I only have a few concerns about the quality of my personal narrative. The first one being my vivid details. I believe that I need help with my vivid details because my narrative just seems bland. I really want to fix this so that my story can enrapture the reader. Another concern that I have is my sentence fluency. My entire narrative seems like it is made up of super long sentences.

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  1. Robert X.September 20, 2017 at 1:02 PM

    I can relate to this, as I also feel that most of my narrative is passable, but there are a few spots for concern. I like that you made this post itself fully personal, so keep up the good work!

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